How to revise your novel (part 4)
This is the fourth post in a series about novel revision. Part 1 considered characters and pace. Part two covered conflict, flashbacks, and thought vs. action. Part 3 tackled beginnings, endings, and dialogue. Today it’s that old saw: show don’t tell.
How to revise your novel (part 3)
This is the third post in a series about novel revision. Part 1 considered characters and pace. Part two covered conflict, flashbacks, and thought vs. action. This post tackles beginnings, endings, and dialogue.
How to revise your novel (part 2)
This is the second post in a series about novel revision. In part 1 we considered characters and pace. This post will tackle conflict, flashbacks, and thought vs. action.
How to revise your novel (part 1)
Manuscript evaluation is one of the things I do for a living. In a nutshell: I read someone’s manuscript and return detailed notes to get them started on re-writes. Every story is unique but there are several common issues that plague all our drafts (mine too). If you’re struggling to revise your manuscript, here are three things to watch for…
Put the toast to work
Dialogue is one thing but what about the stage business? Action in a scene - a character moving through a space, physically interacting with other characters - serves several functions. It enlivens the narrative while grounding it in a fictional reality. And it paints a picture, allowing the reader to visualize the story. I'm a fan of interweaving stage business with dialogue, sometimes even using it to replace dialogue tags (he said/ she said). For example, consider:
Dialogue tips from the Port Authority
My writing group was exchanging emails about dialogue, why it flatlines and how it can be revived. Putting words in a character’s mouth - words that sound authentic and are compelling to read - is no easy feat. So the next few posts will be devoted to dialogue.
There are no hard and fast rules for good writing and anyone who tells you otherwise is either lying or ignorant. But there are guidelines that will serve you well 75-90% of the time. Note the spread: 75-90% of the time, you can safely defer to the playbook. The other 10-25% of the time, you’re better off improvising or breaking the rules. Caveat aside, let’s begin.
How to write summary dialogue
This is the second in a series of posts about dialogue. If you missed the first post, go back.
In my last post, I promised more practical advice on how to write dialogue. I also likened dialogue to a screwdriver and said there are three types, each with its own specific use. This post is about summary dialogue. My understanding of the three types of dialogue (summary, indirect, direct) is heavily indebted to Janet Burroway’s Writing Fiction: A Guide to Narrative Craft. If you only read one book on how to write fiction, let it be Burroway’s.
How to write indirect dialogue
This is the third post in a series about dialogue. Start here, if you’ve missed the others. This post focuses on indirect dialogue (my personal favourite).
Indirect Dialogue
Indirect dialogue is reported in the third person so you get the feel of the exchange, without the actual words.
How to write direct dialogue
This is the fourth in a series of posts about writing dialogue. If you’ve missed the previous posts, start here.
Direct Dialogue
Direct dialogue is the one we all know and tend to overuse. It’s word-for-word what the characters are saying. It’s useful when you want to get in real close, write from within the scene, at a moment of crisis, discovery, decision, or climax. Direct dialogue not only ups the drama, it is more precise at revealing character because we have their exact words.
Mastering dialogue
This is the fifth and last in a series of posts about writing dialogue. If you’ve missed the previous posts, start here.
Putting it altogether
So now you’ve got your three screwdrivers. You know how to use them. Let’s get to work.
Trick for dialogue
Recently, I was having trouble writing a scene. In this scene a man and a woman are having an argument. The scene is third person, past tense, from the woman’s point of view. So I knew more or less what she was going to say, her motivations, her fears, her desires, but I had no clue how the man would respond. Or, more specifically, I knew how he would respond but his exact dialogue and body language, all of that was a question mark.
The voices in your head
Characters come into their own when I first hear them speak. And that's how I primarily write dialogue - it bubbles up from the unconscious part of my brain that is always at work. I may have trouble with story arcs and pace but putting words in characters' mouths has always felt natural.
But like any other part of the craft, there is some element of science here too. Here are some technical suggestions:
TSN turning point
One day in July 1984 biathelete Kari Swenson was abducted in the mountains. I heard her story the other night while making dinner and listening to the podcast Criminal. I was struck by Kari’s ordeal but also left thinking about craft because there is a lot we can learn about storytelling by paying attention to the facts of this story and its construction.
Meanwhile, back at the ranch
Here’s some writing advice I got a few years ago about plot and structure. Replace the words “and then” with “but,” therefore,” and “meanwhile.”
Cathedral
And then there's Eleanor Catton's The Luminaries, a book with more than its fair share of plot, "a gothic cathedral of plot!" At 800+ pages, maybe plot, erected on such an intricately designed scale with flying buttresses and gargoyles and stained glass, is necessity more than extravagance.
Lost the plot
Tessa Hadley has perfected a magic trick. And I want to know her secret.
She writes these novels - the most recent one is the excellent The Past - that break the rules of plot. Specifically the main rule that plot should progress in an Aristotelian arc.
Upcoming events
Heads up about two upcoming events that I’m taking part in: one this Sunday and the next on Monday. Writers at Woody Point is re-broadcasting the conversation I had last August with Ian Williams about his Giller-winning novel Reproduction. It’ll be available on Facebook for 24 hours only, beginning Sunday at 7pm NDT. This session is free and open to the public. You don’t need a Facebook account to watch. This conversation was originally broadcast live in August 2020, during Writers at Woody Point 2020.
On Monday, I’ll be live on CBC Radio’s Cross Talk taking questions about writing from callers. There’s always a small possibility breaking news could bump me off to Tuesday but barring that, you can call in to have your craft questions answered at 709-722-7111 // 1-800-563-8255
Cure your writer’s block
Sometimes writing is a challenge. We sit at our desks, pens in hand or fingers poised over the keyboard and….[drum roll]…… NOTHING. I had a spell like this during lock down last June. With no where to go and no one to see, I had plenty of time to write but every day, I sat in the garden, and laboured away with limited success and much frustration. Finally, I remembered something important (the cure for writer’s block!). Writing is not the only work.
Character is king
Like everyone else with a Netflix account, I was obsessed with the first season of Stranger Things. The Stephen King font and creepy opening music, the retro 80s vibe, that nerdy kid with no teeth....all of it hooked me.
Character alignment
A podcast I love is Imaginary Worlds, a show about "how we create them and why we suspend our disbelief." Even though I'm not a sci fi/ fantasy nut, I'm hooked on this show. Mainly because it gets at what I am interested in: story telling and fiction-making.
The most recent episode, on the topic of character, is especially instructive. Good versus evil and all the shades (six, to be exact) in between.